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Post by SCW Mystery Co-Owner on Jun 17, 2012 20:30:56 GMT -6
Alright guys...card is up. Would've been sooner, however Father's Day kept me pretty busy. Hope you guys enjoyed it...leave your comments, questions, critiques...anything you want in this thread.
Credit to everyone who sent in segments this week. The match writing breakdown is as follows:
TGO: Reilly/Underwood & Demarco/cVc Mystery Co-Owner: Dan/Dixon & Anderson/Hammer GM Jeffrey James: Crisis/Crawler
Hope you guys liked it...the participants and matches for next week's show will be announced tonight.
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Post by Andre Dixon on Jun 18, 2012 0:54:12 GMT -6
All I can say is wow. Just wow. Great job on the results yet again guys. I really enjoyed it. Great job to whoever wrote my match. It was a great back and forth battle. Great work this week to Dan too. I really enjoyed his work and look forward to seeing more and I'm sure we will be meeting down the line.
And that ending was crazy. I honestly didn't see it coming but really liked it. A new force (The Trinity) is introduced as the first stable in the SCW. Won't hurt having the GM on their side as well. I really enjoyed it. Can't wait to see the card for next week.
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Post by justinreilly on Jun 18, 2012 2:21:19 GMT -6
I'll start off with the good points to the card...
Things seemed to flow very well, and the commentators seemed to gel more than last week. There still seems to be a little uncertainty as to which is the "face" commentator, and which is the "heel". Just look at real commentators, and there's always one you like, and one who has opinions you don't like. JR has always been liked, and Lawler used to be someone that you enjoy but rarely agreed with.
I also liked the segments going more into detail the different characters we have here in the SCW.
The matches turned out very well, and the people that needed to be squashed were.
Now here is the bad. Well it's not really bad, but things that need to be attended to.
1. It's nothing big, but there are some hiccups is several parts of the show. During the Crisis v. Nightcrawler match the Predator announcement listed the weights as height 7ft 375lbs, for example. Minor, but I thought I'd mention it.
2. This goes out to Justin Underwood. I would certainly suggest shortening your entrance. It just seemed to go on too long, and appeared much longer than anyone else'.
3. Towards the end of the card, the arrival of Rik Ellis repeats itself within the same paragraph. Just a small hiccup, but again I thought worth mentioning.
4. Also in that last segment it starts with the new GM getting into the ring, about to leave, and then somehow he's back at the stage heading to the ring with TGO. Another small hiccup.
5. I only have one complaint about my match. Why is it that Reilly becomes obviously frustrated that Underwood kicked out in his first pin attempt? Before the pin attempt Reilly had only hit 2 moves (3 if you count the whip). Other than that I enjoyed the match.
Overall it's a step up from the show last week, but as always there are things that could improve. I only say this because once the small things get fixed, the cards will be amazing. Great work to all the writers, and I look forward to the card next week.
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Post by accelerator on Jun 18, 2012 8:12:54 GMT -6
Enjoyed reading the card this morning. I was wondering how the "Ace" bit would go, and I think it went alright. Now maybe people can start other guesses on who the co-owner is *lol*.
Good matches, although it's never as good when you have more than half your matches be squashes. Nothing you can do about that in a young fed, though; those are just going to happen. The last two were pretty exciting. From what I read, it seemed like the right people won. I will admit I'm not huge on the ending, but then, I hated it when the WWF did similar antics with the Undertaker. *shrugs* To each his own.
So who will be uniting against the Trinity? Should be interesting...
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Post by SCW Mystery Co-Owner on Jun 18, 2012 8:36:19 GMT -6
Yea, I re-read the card this morning and there were several errors that should have been caught.
I'll be honest, with it being Father's Day yesterday and finding myself short on time, I sort of rushed through the proof reading process which is why you see a few hiccups here and there. That will definitely be ironed out in the future.
Glad you guys liked it, though...next week's should be better...always love the feedback good/bad it gives us a great idea on what we need to keep doing and what we need to work on.
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Post by Major Kendu on Jun 18, 2012 9:07:22 GMT -6
i agree with Justin on most parts. Underwood: you need to shorten your entrance. it's as long as a segment or shitty no show matches. please revamp it. The Trinity will be interesting aswell. overall i liked the show. still shows signs of a new fed but over time it will get better. and i can't wait for this weeks show. should be even better than the last two.
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Post by Night Crawler on Jun 18, 2012 10:30:40 GMT -6
Excellent all around (hicups aside, of course). Matches were great (love working the personality of the wrestlers into the matches, too few places do that anymore) commentary was awesome, very interesting segments.
We're rolling now!
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Post by GM Jeffrey James on Jun 18, 2012 12:58:45 GMT -6
Sorry I didn't talk to you before the segment Crawler... but I had a feeling you wouldn't mind.
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Post by Night Crawler on Jun 18, 2012 19:46:40 GMT -6
yeah, no problems on my end, man. I appreciate the surprise Certainly can't complain about my character acting in character, doing something I would've wanted him to do anyways.
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Post by R.M. Strong on Jun 19, 2012 5:52:53 GMT -6
great all around card, but one complaint.... how did i become part of this "trinity" thing?
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Post by "Gentleman" Jim Douglas on Jun 19, 2012 6:26:12 GMT -6
You didn't moan the last time we did a "Trinity thing"... Enjoyed reading the card guys. Nice mix of segs. Would just like to throw my name in the hat for matchwriting if any of the usual guys need a hand. Expect lots of segs from me next week as well!
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Post by The Great One on Jun 19, 2012 9:39:58 GMT -6
You're not a part of it (from what I understand)
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Post by R.M. Strong on Jun 19, 2012 11:17:45 GMT -6
i read it as "welcome to the trinity rm strong and nightcrawler...." i demand explination
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Post by Night Crawler on Jun 19, 2012 17:08:47 GMT -6
as the GM explained it to me, you and I are the stable and he is the manager. I didn't know about it either, but I don't see a problem with it, personally.
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Post by R.M. Strong on Jun 19, 2012 19:00:56 GMT -6
well, i do.....
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