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Post by Major Kendu on Jun 22, 2012 13:52:43 GMT -6
Ive only been E fedding for about 4 months now so i have a lot to work on. any feedback is grateful and I will use it to make myself better.
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Post by Chris Schofield on Jun 27, 2012 18:31:39 GMT -6
I had a read through your rps, I think double checking spelling and grammar would help with the readability and flow of your pieces.
They were well written and did have some readability and flow there just perhaps could be more.
They were intersting and I found them enjoyable, you had some good match talk though, and this is really just my own personal thing, I didn't really pick up any profound insight into your character. Who is he? What makes him tick etc?
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