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Post by markatkins on Jun 21, 2012 15:54:42 GMT -6
Hey, my name is Tim and I haven't done this in about 5years. My character is Mark "The Playboy" Atkins, and I've been working on this new gimmick with him. I just kind of wanted some feedback as far as what people thought of that first roleplay. I'm going to divulge different information about Mark as I go, giving his background a little at a time so people can see what made the character the way he is.
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Post by Nikko Magna on Jun 22, 2012 12:39:50 GMT -6
Alright I'm going to be coming across as a very brutal person, but oh well. Look Tim. The character you have portrayed in the first roleplay is mediocre at best because all of us have seen it done time and time again. The playboy gimmick is over used and rarely made unique. I'm not saying you can't pull this off and make it unique.. I'm just saying your first roleplay was predictable and bland. You need to break up your talking and not have it all in one paragraph. Huge paragraphs are tacky looking and cause some, much like myself to loose interest extremely fast.
Outside of that, I do feel that the playboy gimmick although over used and very much abused EVERY where, can be brought back to life if the person doing it is careful, smart, and plans out everything properly to a T. Bring a unique twist into the character, that makes your roleplays worth reading Tim. Use detail and spell check to bring it to life.
With all that, I do hope you are able to take some of this and use it to motivate you. Use it to slap your brain and get your juices running... and FOR the love of god, please do some research on some of the more notorious playboys out there. You will be surprised how well that can help.
A lot of people go half assed with this gimmick... If you want to make it work, give it everything you got man. Hope to read more from you.
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Post by GM Jeffrey James on Jun 23, 2012 11:37:26 GMT -6
I won't go into a lot of detail here Tim, if you want we can chat via PM in more detail.
But what I saw from your rp was fairly solid. It's hard to judge your character so soon after only seeing a rp. But we can talk and I can't show you how I graded your first one and that can give you some ideas as to how to improve what you've got going for you.
As for the character I like it... I don't care if there are 15,000 other playboys running around other places... you're the only one we've got (besides the Virgin Killer but he's enhancement talent). So SCW is your playground.
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